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The Man From Down The Street

Nsisong Effiong12 May 2012
Going down the street, I saw a man staring intently at a wall I didn't believe he was as old as he looked because poverty had obviously taken him as mate for life and bent him into shape
His clothes were worn from use and hung loosely on him. His shirt was carelessly tucked into the trouser bunched around his waist by a belt with more broken places than my lips at the height of harmattan. The only nice thing on his ensemble was his shoe - amply scuffed, worn down at the heels and polished off with dust
Thoughts shuffled through my mind and slowly I came to agree that whatever was on the wall that could make a man whom life obviously gave no quarter Stop! and stare! Was worth at least a cursory glance so I walked on to investigate
I was surprised? No! Disappointed? No!
He was staring at an obituary poster. His poverty was evidently mirrored in the dead man staring back at him and I knew for sure he was wondering when it will be his turn and probably if he could get a picture on a wall too when the time came then he might finally win a small victory Against a callous world
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Responses11 responses
Kabolobari12 May 2012

Wow, it hit me!

It's gonna be my poem of the day!

Even the speaker is right in his reading and interpreting of the poverty-made-old man's mind. Must have shown in his eyes for anyone investigating to see. We agree so.

This illustrates exactly what most of us imagine when looking some obituary photographs on the wall. We ignore the callousness of death and the life left we could behind and wonder whether we may be thus honored as we are seeing in some photo.

Of course, even if we made and left preparations we can never be sure our wishes shall be kept or that we may be worn the "good clothes" at death we never could wear at birth and living.

The music is free-form but the sense brings it melody. So, I'll take this with me today.

oreoluwade12 May 2012

Gr8 poem. Calls for deep thinking. Kabolobari has said it all. In addition, I love free versed poems. Thumbs up bro.

Nsisong Effiong12 May 2012

Glad you could connect to the piece. Thank you for sparing time to drop your thoughts. Do have a lovely weekend

Nsisong Effiong12 May 2012

I love free verses too! Thank you for your comment

emitons12 May 2012

Nice piece

Nsisong Effiong12 May 2012

Thank you bro

thisisEseosa12 May 2012

Awwww. This is so touching. A great piece.

Nsisong Effiong12 May 2012

I appreciate your support

Kabolobari13 May 2012

You know you could really sympathize with poverty and not mention it in a poem, for reason of beautiful intimation as a sweetness in poetry?

D'you like your composition irregularly punctuated, or not punctuated at all? Is it your experiment with free form, or is it inadvertent?

This is my poem for today and I still like it and may push it in even to tomorrow. There's melody in melancholy and this poem is playing just such a melody in its drama!

Why, the speaker may not even understand what it means to be poor and may have just decided to take a shot at it for the very first time, and here's his conclusion: ...

Nsisong Effiong13 May 2012

Between beautiful intimation and realistic intimation sometimes there can be no compromise.

Most times I punctuate to enforce rhymes and structure but whenever I flirt with free form I punctuate sparingly and only where its absolutely necessary. That way there is more room to vary with tempo and flow and gives freedom to the melody of the free form.

I'm glad you enjoy the poem and your view that the speaker may not really understand poverty may not be far from the truth. After all he could only relate to his '...lips at the height of harmattan'

And you seem to have decided that our speaker is a 'he' so I'll go along with you

odeshinabola22 May 2012

Life can pretty hard for folks in this part of the world. My message is for people to stay strong in the midst of trials. Hope of a better future brings happiness which somehow nourishes the body and soul. There are occasional thoughts abt the reality of hardship. We'll prevail.
I'm sure I won't be the last to comment. Apologies I am just finding time to read through

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